Wednesday 8 March 2017

Where am I?


Clothes are blowing in the gentle breeze. Green plants sprout like fountains while the paint is peeling.
The cabins in the distance have a large X marked on the porch. Maybe there is treasure.
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5 comments:

  1. AnonymousMarch 10, 2017 1:16 pm

    Nice work Jayden but you can make it a-bit longer and more interesting by adding it to a story.
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  2. AnonymousMarch 10, 2017 5:43 pm

    Hi Jayden,

    I like how you suggested their was treasure behind the X on the porch. What sort of treasure did you have in your cabin? Lots of smelly socks I'm sure. Keep up the great blogging.

    Whaea Alice

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  3. AnonymousMarch 15, 2017 4:12 pm

    "Green plants sprout like fountains" is an amazing metaphor Jayden. Nice work.

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  4. AnonymousMarch 15, 2017 4:13 pm

    "Green plants sprout like fountains" is an amazing simile Jayden. Nice work.

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  5. AnonymousApril 01, 2017 9:29 pm

    This is an awesome piece of writing Jayden. It is short but it says such alot. I like how you make it exciting by mentioning treasure. Keep up the great work.�� Kim.

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