It was a gloomy night and the lighthouse was on.
Everyone was going to bed except the people
at the pub. Some adults were cheering every time
the light came by.
The lighthouse is made out of hard bricks and inside the lighthouse was an old man. He jumped as the window opened and then he slammed the window shut because of the noisey cheering.
Suddenly the light turned off. Then in the lighthouse Keeper went up the stairs. He had a look at the light. A boat was on its way and it could hit the rocks?
The Keeper took the the light off its hinges but he tripped over and smashed the light. He looked horrified because a boat was close to the rocks. Then he had an idea.
The Keeper got people from the town to bring their lanterns up the hill and hold up their lanterns so the boat could see land. Luckily the boat safely sailed by.
The lighthouse is made out of hard bricks and inside the lighthouse was an old man. He jumped as the window opened and then he slammed the window shut because of the noisey cheering.
Suddenly the light turned off. Then in the lighthouse Keeper went up the stairs. He had a look at the light. A boat was on its way and it could hit the rocks?
The Keeper took the the light off its hinges but he tripped over and smashed the light. He looked horrified because a boat was close to the rocks. Then he had an idea.
The Keeper got people from the town to bring their lanterns up the hill and hold up their lanterns so the boat could see land. Luckily the boat safely sailed by.
Oh wow Jayden, You have done a great job. I just added the paragraphs and added a space after the full stops. I love the way it makes sense - you must have read it out loud to check for sense.
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glowing lanterns
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